What is failure…?

…an opportunity to learn! – Let’s critique the shots that did get shot for Free Parking, and juice it for all the gems and lessons we can get from it. The first scene from the compilation of yesterday’s post is of our main character going tschool while he’s late. Lets compare it to something we may already be familiar with…

The following is the scene from “Back to the Future” where Marty realizes that he’s late for school.

http://www.leechonfilms.com/wp-content/uploads/2007/11/bttf_marty_late_for_school.flv

This next sequence is from Chicken Little where Ace is rushing to school because he has missed his bus.

http://www.leechonfilms.com/wp-content/uploads/2007/11/chicken_little_late_for_school.flv

Now let’s compare that to the sequence I posted yesterday:

http://www.vimeo.com/391050

Here are a few things that I’ve noticed that were different from my own “Late for Class!” scene:

• If you have seen the entire movie, you will notice neither of these two scenes are the opening sequences, they are actually after the major opening sequence. Read my script and You’ll notice that I’ve opened the film with this before I’ve even managed to have the audience’s attention.
• There is an upbeat sound score for each of the sequences to add to the fast-pace nature of the scene and the sense of urgency the character has.
• There are a lot of shots of the surrounding area and environment which gives a feeling and vibe for the character’s setting. Most of my shots were close quarters.
• There are many elements of humor in the sequence. There is hardly any humor in my sequence…which is sad considering the film is suppose to be fun and entertaining.
• There is hardly any dialog, just action.
• Scenes consist most of long-shots and extreme long-shots of the character, with the occational medium-shot and medium close-up to give off elements of the character’s personality. My own medium close-ups and medium shots didn’t give out any elements of the character’s personality except perhaps in the part when the engine isn’t working in the flash back.
• The camera is always in constant fast-pace motion either to keep up with the object of focus or to follow it as it goes, bring about, while most of my own shots are just simple fly by follow shots and static position.
• There is plenty of interactivity of the character with its surroundings, while in mine there was hardly any.
  

Was there anything else that you noticed?

Can anyone recommend any good sequences from movies that I can compare the “Gimmi My Keys!!” scene?

Can thing be brought back from the dead?

A friend of mine was asking about Free Parking and wanted to see the “Rough Cut.” Although this project was canceled I kept the footage and the edits I had made when it was in production. You can watch what the film could have been if the production was planned better.

You may read the script to the short here: Free Parking Script

http://www.vimeo.com/391050

If you cannot see the Vimeo video above, watch the low quality YouTube video below